I feel like i am sitting in silence in a peaceful room observing every single detail around me. Like savoring the peacefulness around. Although my tempo of peace was disrupted from the line and the line below cricket but it is a beautiful piece. Keep up! :)
Its quite good man... simple assumption and then its consequences. your flow is good :)
KEEP ON WRITING, , , :)
if you don't mind I'd say go a bit ahead, be more imaginative, show your uniqueness... when you write something it probably has occurred to you as a unique thought which not only inspire the reader but make him think about it in awe that yesssss it is possible, i never thought about that.