Jonathan Howard's last comments on poems and poets
(2/16/2006 4:31:00 PM)
Iambic septameter! What a pleasant surprise! A good way with words, I especially liked the witty rhyme of lines 11-12, and verses 5-6 generally. In fact, the lines make it a sonnet! Even a little division between line 8 and 9, though there's no real volta.
But that's me rambling on converting this into a sonnet. I love it in the couplets, though; very fragmented - in the positive sense - and cute-sounding to the ear.
Thank you! I'm actually abrasive at rhyming, as you may notice. This one just plopped-out well. But one thing I am glad about is being a metronome: the odd iambic PENTameter lines are very deliberate - they work on a higher level or rhythm throughout the last three verses. Not just accentual-syllabic, but some higher form, thanks to my senses. I just flowed with it.
One of my better works. I just keep rhyme because it sounds nice, but I have some blank-verse too. Might upload later...