Hey Bonnie, This poem of yours...It makes me so sad because i just hear this loving saddness as you write. Keep writing girl and let your heart be heard.
I will agree with anyone that says its a very well written but i think you should reach out to the world you least understand and see hwo that effects your writing. Lovely beyong comparison though.
Im still an amature so i kinda prefer the first version of it but still 10!