We all acknowledge Annan and his team of eminent persons for showing us where the rain started beating us. You may want cut out some words though. I think this ode would be so much memorable if you would aim at being economical with your words.
The idea is refreshingly great. Am assuming that the persona is addressing a god-mother of sorts, an elderly woman, married even, who has, and still is, doing great things that inspire them. I think it is possible to cut out some some words to concretize the idea and make the poem even better.