there's something interesting in this one, it is written like it is some kind of a song. We can even hear the tune.
Nice job. Just pay attention to the repetitions, I know you are doing it on purpose but you have to find another way to repeat your ideas and just by rewriting the same lines
in order to make your poem long, you keep repeating the same ideas, the same feelings.It's a bad thing. You have to understand that a poem has nothing to do with how long or how less you write. A poem has to express powerful feelings, contain hidden messages that ordinary people are not able to think those by themselves.
I believe you have the potential to do so. You just need practice :)
first of all congratulations, it is very well written.It is simple yet interesting.
Second, if you are going to use poetry just to express your depression, you better find so many different ways to do so. Otherwise all of your poems are going to look alike by their themes and by their structure and style. There's no problem in writing under the same atmosphere, under one subject, all you have to do is to find very interesting and different ways and styles to do so.
Third, I see that you have a strong confidence in yourself, that's a very good things. Don't lose it ;)