I think this poem is pretty amazing and very heartfelt but there are a few things i would like to say. In regards to 'I was happy'-If you're not happy now then be with this girl not with 'She'. It sounds like whoever this poem is for is the girl you really love and should be with. It isnt fair for 'She' to only get a 'hollowed shell'. And maybe you should try talking to this girl about it all, maybe she loves you back.
(5/18/2005 7:01:00 PM)
Like the pace of it, it's filled with alot of emotion and is very sad. Problems like this should be shared though. Try talking to someone to see if that helps.