Your use of speed to give your poem a frantic nature after the line I bolt upright Is truly a gift. But I must admit I am left in a frantic state like something is missing. Now don't get me wrong I really enjoyed and liked this poem It is my favorite out of all of yours. *****just a suggestion******* try this
Who will be there
Someone who really cares
Now I know
I don't have to be alone anymore
Now I finally know...........
will grow old.
A lot of young people trying out poetry or just writing/expressing thoughts and feelings miss 1 very important thing. They have no direction. They have no point. They have no destination they want to go with their poem. I am glad that you showed that direction, that for-thought of where you wanted your poem to go.