Here one is presented with the power of word usage in the right hands. In one sense there is a comical feel to this as the middle line creates a justification (as if it were needed) for the next line and the rhyme itself.
I drank two cups of tea reading this.
(1/13/2009 1:15:00 PM)
That you work with different forms and master them so well is what makes you a damned fine poets Sue.
This is just another example. For me the use of language in this is breathtaking. The repetition of feeling in the three stanzas is powerfully expressed. But the repetition of ‘... an empty glass...’ conveys a great deal of suspense and tension that one normally associates with a good thriller.
(1/13/2009 1:14:00 PM)
I agree with Tomas about the imagery of this. There is an earthy feel to the narrative. The language is basic and yet is raised to another level by the way it is used. ‘In this third floor hospital room, I'm waiting the call to surgery.’ Really throws the reader as to what is going on. Again the reader is flattered by the poet’s assumption that something will be understood.