Anyway, it's hard to write poetry in the dark. but at any case, being atypical is great for a young poet like you.
what i want with this poem is that it is very real and has a sense of enthusiasm in itself. it is not pretentious and it does not hide anything irrelevant today. good work.
a poem like this can be labeled as syntactically failed but deep in essence. the messages between the lines speak for themselves. not evry poet has the capabilty to write a superficial yet a fundamental literary work. well done deonny