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Luis Estable Oriente / Cuba, Male, 59
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Latest 5 Poems of Luis Estable

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  • POEM: Never Too Old To Fall In Love by Francis Duggan (4/2/2017 6:50:00 PM)

    This poem could read better if it had some kind of punctuation. As it is right now, it has many faults such as: The gift of love to it does. For the zero punctuation here this line does not mean anything in a clear way. It is not complete. And this: ...and of love songs are sung. If one sees what comes before and after, the line is confusing and so needs work. One more among other things: the gift of love belong when it should be belongs to agree with subject and verb.

    This poem needs much work to work as a true poem that means more than a cliche of lines and words. Even the rhyme scheme is too lose to work well here.

    I could point others details, but this will have to do now.

    Thanks you for your effort and go to work.

    KIndly yours,

    Luis Estable

    PS

    This is to help you not to hurt you. If I want to do that, I have to be honest about what I think of your try.

  • POEM: Quite Bad by Marilyn Jean (1/4/2017 6:49:00 PM)

    There is a confusion here with this: You write lets finish, but I think this should be let us or let`s finish. To whom the speaker is talking to here, I do not see. There are other problems here like the lack of punctuation to make the break of the line clear. Nice effort though.

    Luis A. Estable

  • POEM: Little Dream by marty webb (1/4/2017 6:40:00 PM)

    Sleep little dream does not do it for me, and need more diction here to get to the bottom of it or this. We usually don`t talk of a dream going to sleep in the way that you put it here.

    Yes, the language is poetic, but one, sometimes, can use poetic words without the poem being good. Poetic language alone does not do it at times.

    I think you can give us here more than just that little dream and what comes with it. But nice try

    Luis A. Estable

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