In this poem, you use absurdities to weave metaphors; I think I like it. Very experimental, but you must keep learning and advancing for that is what makes a great poet. We poets must pass through this route. Keep writing!
The fourth stanza 'close your eyes and feel....' sounds like a meditating exercise that connects us to God. I like this, coz it makes us appreciate God the more and all that he had deposited in us from the time of creation.
This is a true expression of indepth feelings; a sort of confession that tends to be provocative but true. A lot of lovers out there, do find themselves in the same shoe but lack the courage to express it, thus keep pretending till a time indefinite. The diction is simple but the poem, in my humble opinion, is a worthwhile addition to a collection. Don't lose the touch, keep writing quality works.